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2017年關(guān)于考研英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作之小作文講解
小作文是考研英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作中比較容易拿分，甚至拿高分的部分�？墒怯捎谛∽魑男枰⒁獾牡胤奖容^多，加上考場(chǎng)上緊張、焦急，很多小伙伴會(huì)在這個(gè)地方出現(xiàn)不該有的失誤�，F(xiàn)在，文都英語(yǔ)老師將以一篇學(xué)生寫(xiě)的小作文為例，現(xiàn)場(chǎng)傳授在小作文部分勇奪高分的“秘籍”。我們先看下下面的范文。
范文：
Dear Li Ming
I am writing this mail is to congratulate on yours admitted to a university and put forward suggestion regarding the preparation for university life. The detailed information is listed as the following.
At the top of the list , the university is one of the most important parts of our life ,you may have a wonderful life in it. Another point I would like to draw your attention is that inthe campus , you may have much free time , you should take good advantage of it. In addition , there are many excellent people in the university ,you should be modest in it .
I am looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. And I am greatly grateful for your time and attention.
Truely yours
Zhang Wei
點(diǎn)評(píng)：
本篇作文的作者在每段開(kāi)頭首行縮進(jìn)4個(gè)字符，這點(diǎn)做的很不錯(cuò)，但還是存在一些問(wèn)題：
⑴格式錯(cuò)誤
�、貲ear Li Ming這個(gè)稱(chēng)呼后面應(yīng)該加逗號(hào);
②yours后面也要加逗號(hào)。
�、普Z(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤
�、俚谝欢蔚谝痪湓�(huà)中有兩個(gè)謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞am writing和is;on是介詞，后面應(yīng)該接動(dòng)名詞，所以應(yīng)該是admitting,但此處是“被錄取”，應(yīng)該用被動(dòng)。這句話(huà)應(yīng)該改為：I am writing this mail to congratulate you on your being admitted into a university;
�、趶牡诙慰�，提出的建議不止一個(gè)，而suggestion可數(shù)，所以應(yīng)該用suggestions;
�、墼敿�(xì)內(nèi)容如下，The detailed information is listed as follows和The detailed information is listed as the following都可以，只不過(guò)the following一般做前置定語(yǔ)，前面一個(gè)句子是常用的表達(dá)，后面一個(gè)句子用的較少;
�、�“在我們的生活中大學(xué)是最重要的部分之一”應(yīng)該是in our life. Another point I would like to draw your attention is……I would like to draw your attention做后置定語(yǔ)，但這里要注意：雖然draw attention to是固定搭配，但這個(gè)to加不加都行。第二段的內(nèi)容還行，但是論述不夠充分，應(yīng)適當(dāng)拓展;
�、葑詈笠⒁獾氖荰ruly yours的書(shū)寫(xiě)，尤其是“Truly”的書(shū)寫(xiě);
�、莾�(yōu)化建議
�、俦硎�“第一、第二、第三”的連詞：
To begin with, furthernore,/what is more, Last but not least
In the first place In the second place At last
�、谠诘诙卫锩妫ㄗh提出一個(gè)觀點(diǎn)之后用一句話(huà)闡述。如果字?jǐn)?shù)太多，可以只用2個(gè)觀點(diǎn);如果字?jǐn)?shù)偏少，則可以提出三個(gè)觀點(diǎn)，再略作闡述。
�、郾硎�“重要”的詞：crucial, fundamental, essential
文都英語(yǔ)老師認(rèn)為，這篇文章總的來(lái)說(shuō)沒(méi)有大的問(wèn)題，都是細(xì)節(jié)性的。但是格式方面的問(wèn)題是最基本的問(wèn)題，也是最不該出錯(cuò)的，平時(shí)要多注意。須知“細(xì)節(jié)決定成敗”，認(rèn)真才能成功!
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